Yay! I'm so glad to see some more fic from you. Love.
I had a VM marathon over the holidays and then went on to read your YLD and YLD2 - which are amazing.
I've really enjoyed a foray into this fandom w/ your fic, which is smart and on character. Its been so interesting to watch your writing style develop and I can already see w/ this fic that your descriptive style is much stronger.
Evocative phrases... "a thousand fingers tap on the roof." "unsteadiness of the verge, with the eddies taunting me and the waves lapping at me hungrily" -You've given the elements a personality and made them a foil for V's internal dialogue. And the image of K buckling V into the car - brilliant. His caring for her, her chafing at the restraint, what the law means to him. This is showing, not just telling. Very good.
I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this. (even though, as a rule I don't like WIP)
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Date: 2011-01-07 06:24 am (UTC)I had a VM marathon over the holidays and then went on to read your YLD and YLD2 - which are amazing.
I've really enjoyed a foray into this fandom w/ your fic, which is smart and on character. Its been so interesting to watch your writing style develop and I can already see w/ this fic that your descriptive style is much stronger.
Evocative phrases... "a thousand fingers tap on the roof." "unsteadiness of the verge, with the eddies taunting me and the waves lapping at me hungrily" -You've given the elements a personality and made them a foil for V's internal dialogue. And the image of K buckling V into the car - brilliant. His caring for her, her chafing at the restraint, what the law means to him. This is showing, not just telling. Very good.
I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this. (even though, as a rule I don't like WIP)
Thanks you!
~Jenn