VanessaGalore

I am really trying hard with the description, so thank you for looking at it closely. My goal is to show you a lot of Veronica's mood and mindset through the way she's looking at the outside world (which is what I was doing in Precipitation too...but there was not much plot there, so you really were inundated with that description). Yes, Precipitation was more montage-y, Veronica basically wallowing and processing everything that had happened, and there really was very little that actually happened in there, until the end. What I was going for here is that she's seeing the things around her as bleak or even ominous, even though they're just ordinary things.

I think most of us, while appreciating a short burst of metaphorical writing like I used in Precipitation, get fatigued if that style is extended for a long time. In other words, not just me getting tired and frustrated trying to write it, but the reader actually getting bogged down in the verbiage. Yet at the same time I'm trying to be more elegant than just using a constant Veronica voiceover. This is definitely a learning fic for me.

Thanks for reading and commenting. Your insights were very helpful.