first off loved the name, have you got all the chapter names worked out? Really liked the whole chapter, Veronica cuts a very lonely figure, so much of her PI work was enjoyable to her, even the tough cases she appeared to relish the challenge, while this is pure survival. I thought this descriptive passage was very strong :
A few minutes later, we're back on the bus as the sun dips below the horizon. It's a gorgeous sunset, nature having missed the memo on pathetic fallacy. Puffy clouds have gathered to reflect pink and purple hues above the tree line. Flat terrain, unbelievably uniform, as far as the eye can see. Tendrils of fire scorch the sky as the sun etches its departure. There's a last sliver of lava beyond the shadow-blackened trees, and then the sky inexorably deepens through slate blue to charcoal.
and it reminds me of why I have always wanted to travel round the states in a greyhound bus. Preferably not as a fugutive though
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Date: 2011-07-04 10:17 pm (UTC)Really liked the whole chapter, Veronica cuts a very lonely figure, so much of her PI work was enjoyable to her, even the tough cases she appeared to relish the challenge, while this is pure survival.
I thought this descriptive passage was very strong :
A few minutes later, we're back on the bus as the sun dips below the horizon. It's a gorgeous sunset, nature having missed the memo on pathetic fallacy. Puffy clouds have gathered to reflect pink and purple hues above the tree line. Flat terrain, unbelievably uniform, as far as the eye can see. Tendrils of fire scorch the sky as the sun etches its departure. There's a last sliver of lava beyond the shadow-blackened trees, and then the sky inexorably deepens through slate blue to charcoal.
and it reminds me of why I have always wanted to travel round the states in a greyhound bus. Preferably not as a fugutive though