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VERONICA MARS
10:00PM SHO ch: 340 60min 2009 TV-MA
Shades of Noir
Duncan is suspicious of Katya; Wallace
and Candice at her brother's funeral;
Logan and Veronica confront Leo.
Veronica: Kristen Bell. Logan: Jason
Dohring. Leo: Max Greenfield. Wallace:
Percy Daggs III. Duncan 2.0: Chris
Carmack. Candice Pauling: Toy
Connor. Katya: Katherine Heigl.
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CHAPTER FORTY-ONE: "SHADES OF NOIR"

Thurs. 2/26/09 morning: Neptune Grand Hotel, Neptune, CA

When Duncan wakes up, the bed is empty beside him. He walks sleepily out to the living room to find Katya drinking coffee and reading the paper. He sits down next to her and kisses her on the cheek. "You're up early," he comments.

"I woke up, and I couldn't get back to sleep," she explains.

Duncan looks at the paper and sees that Katya is reading a news item about Keith Mars' preliminary hearing on arson charges. He asks, "Do you know Keith Mars? That was his daughter with me after my press conference. I'm...I was very close to her in the past," he finishes lamely.

"I don't know him personally," Katya says smoothly. "Of course I remember the news coverage of your sister's murder and the trial of Aaron Echolls. Neptune has had more than its share of scandals....You must have loved Lilly very much; you named your daughter after her."

Duncan closes his eyes for a moment. "Lilly was...so full of life. She was an intense person; to call her a free spirit doesn't even do her justice. When I found out that I was going to be a father," he glances at Katya, "When I thought I was the father of Meg's baby, I wanted to do something so that my sister could live on."

Katya replies, "She's still your daughter, Duncan. Biology is only part of it; you've raised her."

Duncan nods and changes the topic. "Any more of that coffee?"

Katya says, "There's still half a pot. I'm going to jump in the shower." She caresses Duncan's cheek and goes in the bathroom.

Duncan watches her leave the room. When he hears the shower start, he goes to Katya's purse and begins to dig through it. The lawyers said that I needed to run a background check on Katerina; I can't take the chance that she's got something in her past that Mrs. Manning could bring up to oppose my custody petition. The senior partner said that all of my associates would need to be vetted to prevent any surprises later on. He finds Katerina's driver's license and passport and copies down all the information, intending to ask Veronica to run a background check. Duncan picks up the paper, looks at the story on Keith Mars' preliminary hearing the next day, and sighs. It doesn't look good for Keith. I hope he has something up his sleeve to exonerate himself. Poor Veronica, she must be worried sick.

~ • ~

Thurs. 2/26/09 morning: First Baptist Church, Atlanta, GA

Wallace tries to listen as the friends and family of Shawn Blake eulogize him at his memorial service, but his mind keeps wandering. He thinks about the trip he and Candice made to the small town east of Seattle where Shawn's body was discovered. After Candice officially identified the body from a photo, they arranged for the remains to be shipped back to Atlanta. Wallace queried the detective in charge of the case as to the progress of the investigation. The detective told Wallace that in recent years the national forest just outside of Glacier had become a popular route for methamphetamine smuggling from Canada, and he thought it was possible that Shawn was involved in moving drugs. Wallace asked if any drugs were found on Shawn; the detective shook his head 'no'. Candice was given a bag containing Shawn's effects: a wallet emptied of cash and credit cards; a watch; and a Blackberry device. The detective said they were unable to unlock the Blackberry without a password. Wallace had the distinct impression that the detective was happy to dispose of the case and would not spend any more time on it.

Candice stands up to speak; Wallace squeezes her hand in support, and she looks at him gratefully before walking to the front of the church. Candice tells several stories about Shawn's childhood. Her voice is for the most part strong and steady; however, at times she pauses and gathers herself to continue. Over the past two weeks, as Wallace has helped her with her difficult tasks, she has broken down into tears more than once.

Candice sits back down next to Wallace, and the pastor begins to speak from the lectern. Wallace wishes desperately that he could do more for her; the password-protected Blackberry is the best lead he has to try identify Shawn's murderers. He's already done some research online and found out that three wrong guesses for the password will automatically trigger a complete deletion of the information on the device; Wallace assumes the detective has tried at least once. Two tries left. I wish Mac was around; she'd know how to hack into the Blackberry. Wallace decides to ask his faculty advisor, Professor Winkler, if he knew how to get in touch with his old grad student, Leon, the cryptography expert that Veronica busted in the Magneta-corp student ID scam. Wallace had heard that all the kids involved had gotten off easy, with substantial fines going a long way towards keeping their permanent records clean.

Not for the first time, Wallace wishes Keith could help him with the investigation into Shawn's murder. Since Keith's arrest, Wallace has been reluctant to bother him with anything else. He went with Veronica to bail Keith out; Keith refused to talk with them about the charges and told them not to interfere. Wallace discussed Keith's secretive activities with Veronica, but they were unable to determine exactly why Keith would have burned a car and a shed in Ranchita, and Keith sternly insisted that they needed to leave it alone. Tomorrow's the preliminary hearing; Veronica said she had a plan, but I don't know...it doesn't look good. I don't know what Veronica will do if Keith is convicted. He makes a mental note to call her tonight to wish them good luck at the hearing.

The entire congregation stands, and Wallace joins them, trying to sing along with the hymn. Candice looks at him, and he puts his arm around her waist, whispering in her ear, "We're going to get through this." She leans against him, and he hugs her tightly.

~ • ~

Thurs. 2/26/09: Neptune Sheriff's Department, Neptune, CA

Sheriff Leo D'Amato escorts Logan and Veronica into his office and sits behind his desk.

Without preamble, Logan says, "We know you were hired by my dad to steal the Lilly Kane videotapes."

"What? What are you talking about? I thought you were here to talk about Keith Mars' bail arrangements," Leo says strongly, although a quiver in his voice betrays him. He leans back a little in his chair, affecting a calm demeanor.

"We know you were hired by my dad to steal the Lilly Kane videotapes."

Leo purses his lips and says, "Now, look here, Echolls, you might be able to prove that I sold you the tapes, but you're completely off-base, saying that I stole them for your father. The guy's a murderer; why would I want to help get him off?"

"Money. It's always money," Logan answers. "And you knew Lamb would be too stupid to figure out who took them. But then...when Woody Goodman hired Keith, you panicked. You knew Keith would be able to trace the money, and he would be relentless, after what Aaron did to him and Veronica."

Veronica adds, "So you suggested to my dad that the tapes were stolen to be sold to a tabloid, and he fell for it, hook, line, and sinker. He thought you were a good detective, and he let that blind him to the truth."

Leo laughs hollowly. "Veronica, you know I always liked you, but this theory's ridiculous. I stole the tapes in order to sell them to 'The Instigator'. Your bad boy here is talking nonsense."

Logan explains, "There's no reason to steal both copies of the tapes if you just wanted to sell them to a tabloid. One tape would have been worth the same as two. In fact, why even steal them? Just make a copy, return the tape to the evidence room; no one would know they were ever gone. Nope, the only reason to steal all the copies was to destroy the evidence against Aaron.

Trying to deflect, Leo says, "I'm betting this arson had something to do with Vinnie Van Lowe and the Fitzpatricks. Since when is your dad mixed up with the micks, Veronica?"

Veronica says heatedly, "Dad's not mixed up with anybody, and we're talking about you, what you did, and I'm betting the residents of Neptune would be interested to hear our theory."

Leo says, "You don't really know what your dad is capable of, do you, Veronica? In fact, you don't really have any idea what anybody's capable of."

Veronica replies curtly, "I'm pretty sure I'm not capable of setting a murderer free."

"So what are we talking about here?" Leo asks, resigned.

Veronica says, "Most of the evidence against my dad is circumstantial. The only solid evidence is the bug detector that you found at the scene. Maybe Harmony Chase stole the signal detector in the break-in last fall, and you didn't notice it on the police report until just now. Or maybe it gets lost in the evidence room, since we all know that's already happened a couple times when you've been in charge." Leo glares at Veronica as she continues, "Or you'll just discover that other people in Balboa County also own signal detectors. If the device isn't part of the evidence against my dad, it would be mighty hard to prove that he committed arson. And what's the motive? What possible reason could Keith Mars have to burn a car on a property all the way across the county? I think the district attorney could be persuaded to drop the charges. You made a mistake, Leo. And you're going to tell the DA that you're certain that Keith Mars is innocent."

Leo says sarcastically, "Let me tell you something, Veronica. I really dig your work here. Playing one side against the other, in bed with everybody, just fabulous stuff. What else do I have to do for you and Mr. Risky Business?"

"Nobody forced you to take Aaron Echolls' money to steal the tapes, Leo. And you have my word that it ends here," Veronica replies.

After a pause, Leo says, "I'll change the reports from the break-in last fall." He makes airquotes with his fingers and continues, "I can't believe I didn't notice before now that the bug detector was listed as stolen on the evidence report. I'm sure the district attorney will be relieved to hear that the venerable Keith Mars couldn't possibly be the owner of the evidence we found at the scene, and the charges will be dropped immediately."

Logan states flatly, "Make sure that they are. I'm pretty sure a pretty boy-law enforcement type such as yourself wouldn't thrive in prison if you were convicted of evidence tampering. I bet you'd make a beautiful bride for a white supremacist; you just need to let those curly locks grow a bit."

Leo flushes and retorts, "You'd know, Echolls. You're not exactly lily-pure, are you? You've got some things to answer for. Lilly Kane, Hannah Griffith, not to mention the bum-fights and the riots over swimming pool fires. Oh yeah, don't forget about bashing a cop car with a baseball bat."

At the word 'lily', Logan jumps up, glaring at Leo. Veronica grabs his arm, saying, "No, Logan! We got what we came for. Let's go."

As they leave the sheriff's office, Logan angrily shakes Veronica's hand off his arm. She says, "Logan, we knew. We knew he pulled the wool over everyone's eyes." Especially mine. Dammit, how could I have been so blind?

"Christ, does everyone have to be corrupt in this town? What is it, something in the water?" Logan replies bitterly.


Chapter Forty-Two

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Date: 2008-04-27 01:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] danceprincess20.livejournal.com
I love it. I'm so glad Veronica and Logan are back together. I can't wait to read more!

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:12 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
Thank you! Veronica is brilliant to be sure, but when you add in the inevitable cynicism of Logan Echolls, you get an unstoppable duo. Plus, just think of all the extra fortitude Veronica has due to Logan's fervent midnight ministrations.

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] danceprincess20.livejournal.com
Exactly. As much as I love them separately I love it the most when they're together! And I totally forgot to give the kudos on the airpline chapter. So hot! lol

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] danceprincess20.livejournal.com
Yeah that should say airplane. lol

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Date: 2008-04-27 11:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aly88.livejournal.com
Whoa. Leo? He's evil. Damn. I always liked him too. Totally depressed now. However plane sex cheered me up. And I'm glad you don't have Keith going to jail. That would seriously make me cry.

Wonderful update m'dear! :)

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
Don't be depressed! You have to remember, this is noir. There is no such thing as a character without flaws.

Plane sex is my favorite!! Love me some horny Logan.

Thanks Aly!!

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Date: 2008-04-27 03:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] princessbella24.livejournal.com
Nice. You really kow what we like. The "Mile High Club"?. Best. Club. Ever :p The plane smut was seriously hot, and i mean this: you have a gift for writing all the dirty talk. Really hot.
I really understand Logan´s feelings here. He is in such a bad place in his life that he is desperate to get back to what he was.
I cant believe what Leo did. But i totally see it happening. And yes it must be the water, there´s no other explanation :p
Your Veronica/Keith totally made me tear up. He is trying to protect her and making sure she is taken care of if he goes to jail and i was thinking wow that´s a real dad. I love him.
Thank you!! This fic keeps getting better by the chapter.
I cant wait for the next update.

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:21 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
I exist to serve my readers!! That's why it was so hard for me when you all were getting upset about them being apart for so long...but don't you agree it was worth it?? Logan needed to be away from Veronica for a while so that he could get horny enough to do it in a plane. And you got my point exactly: Logan is desperate to be the sex god that he once was.

Thank you so much for noticing my Keith and Veronica interaction. The show would have been so much weaker without the love between those two. And RT has said several times that he originally intended for Keith to be evil as well, and the network (UPN) insisted that Veronica needed SOMEONE on her side. Can you imagine Veronica without Keith? I can't.

Thanks for commenting!!

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Date: 2008-04-27 07:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] princessbella24.livejournal.com
It was soooo worth it. And it will keep being worth it as long as there are chapters like that one *fans self*
You made me laugh at "Logan needed to be away from Veronica for a while so that he could get horny enough to do it in a plane". Its so simple and yet there´s so much logic to it :P.
I didnt know about that, but i was thinking poor Veronica. I mean, in those post Llly-pre LoVe days, she would have been even more miserable without Keith. Wow, and that was UPN´s idea? Good one.
Thanks for the reply.

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Date: 2008-04-27 03:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kou-shun-u.livejournal.com
awwww, poor leo.
see you had to go on ugly betty and play a villan and now look. your image is tarnished!

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
He was an even worse villain on the show "Life". Check it out if comes out on DVD. The guy's a better actor than I thought. He totally could have pulled off my plotline. I love seeing these actors on other shows: a lot of times, you realize just how diminutive these people are in real life. They always shot VM in such a way that you didn't realize how tiny KB is, and in consequence the other actors' actual heights were concealed as well. See also, Francis Capra on "The Closer".

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Date: 2008-04-27 04:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] smiles1-9.livejournal.com
so glad that V and L reunited, they work better together. That plane sex was serioulsy hot!!

And Leo's evil, dammitt!

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Date: 2008-04-27 06:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
And you all thought I was going to drive them apart again immediately!!

Thanks for commenting!!

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Date: 2008-04-27 08:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sarahbrand.livejournal.com
Yay, Logan's back in Neptune! And it is really, really nice to see Veronica acting to protect Keith, the way he's done for her so often. Fantastic update!

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Date: 2008-04-27 09:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
This whole fic is about consequences, especially consequences for the events of season 2. I like Veronica a lot better, thinking about her courageously stepping up to help the men in her life who did so much for her, rather than blithely doing whatever the hell she felt like doing. Thanks for commenting!

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Date: 2008-04-28 05:02 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Wow, I never thought about Leo like that, but that actually makes a lot of sense as to why he would steal all of the tapes. Hmmmm very interesting. As Veronica says, "In case of emergency, break glass or blackmail." Serves him right for arresting Keith after Keith let him off pretty easy, and eventually rehired him later. Asshole. I love the LoVe interaction at the moment, but I know something big is going to happen soon between them, I can't wait. This was one of the first updates where you didn't start out with Veronica at Briar Hill, also very interesting. This story definitely keeps me on my toes, while feeding my VM addiction. Now since the show has been gone almost a year the fanfiction is fading terrible, especially in the longer story department, and I just don't know what I will do when you finish this story and I don't have anything new and/or worthy to feed my addiction :-(

oops

Date: 2008-04-28 05:03 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vmfanficfanatic.livejournal.com
Ok that was my comment, and I thought I was singed in, don't know what happened there...ooopsies

Re: oops

Date: 2008-04-29 01:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
I keep telling you guys, my plot has completely exploded, and this story is not close to done yet. I know, you're saying, bu-u-ut Vanessa, the fic is already 110,000 words.

So you think Leo should have let Keith slide on the arson? That's a possibility I didn't consider. Rewrite!! Then Leo would have had something to hold over on Keith. Ahh, noir has so many possibilities. It's possible to be flawed in SO many ways.

I'm glad to hear you feel like I'm keeping you on your toes. I'm really trying not to spoonfeed you guys. My fabulous beta-readers really help with that. But they are only about one post ahead, and they are totally nagging me, wanting to know what happens next.

I know what you mean about a VM addiction. The other night I was trolling for a PWP, just to, you know, get me through the night (Isn't that sad, Vanessa Galore has to get a PWP fix too?). Anyways, I looked in a few fandoms and only found one that was kind of okay. Waah. There's something about these characters that really inspires writers in a way that other characters just DON'T. And it's not just the actors either: it's the sublime confluence of writing, acting, and directing along with an extraordinary attention to detail in the show that keeps us coming back for more. Thanks for the nice long comment...I'll try to feed your addiction for as long as possible.

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Date: 2008-04-28 01:38 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] christykq.livejournal.com
Wow, Leo played them all. EvilLeo has something up his sleeve. I’m thinking he’s going to go after Logan now. He got a reaction out of Logan and nothing concerning Logan and his missteps were part of Veronica’s deal. So technically Leo wouldn’t be breaking any agreement with V if he went after Logan.

I love that Keith let V and Logan willingly sleep in the same bed. That makes me laugh because obviously they are sleeping together but Keith doesn’t have to like it. And the thought that Keith couldn’t sleep because of the things the three talked about at dinner made my heart hurt. Poor Keith. He’s just trying to keep his daughter safe. Kudos to him for suggesting V move in with Logan and transfer to UCLA. LoVe needs to get the hell out of dodge before the fit hits the shan.

I’m not really concerned with Wallace’s story right now but I’m sure you’ll have some twists and turns to grab hold of the reader. I’m thinking Duncan’s affair is going to come back and bite him in the butt. Maybe that’s Katerina’s plan???

I’m a little concerned about Briar Hill. Their plant is at the school already so that means V will be going there soon. I’m not sure LoVe will be able to withstand that kind of stress on their relationship. But you’re going to put your readers through the LoVe ringer, aren’t you? You’re evil. I’ve said it before, I’ll say it again. Evil evil evil. On second thought, you gave a lot of hot sex so maybe you’re only worth two evils. LOL! Evil Evil Vanessa!

Great job. Can’t wait for the update next week. Oh yeah and the mysterious password with Sugarpuss and the date was perfect. I forgot to comment on that last time.

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Date: 2008-04-29 01:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
Again, LOVE the speculations. You are just feeding my evil genius. But c'mon, haven't I punished Logan enough? Should I really have Leo go after him?

I see the relationship between Keith and Logan changing ever since Keith found Logan erasing the sex tapes. If Veronica had just COOLED IT in season three, they might have become pretty friendly. After all, they both were concerned with Veronica's safety and pigheadedness. (And both were victims of her moral certitude.)

Yes, I am evil. I admitted it a long time ago! I'm quite warped. I warned you all, massive angst, spiked with humor and smut. And I have to tell you all, I am working SO HARD on the humor (and of course the smut).

And I'm so glad you enjoyed me pimping my one-shot story about Logan's and Veronica's first time Logan's password. Oh in case anyone's reading this and didn't go check out that link, let me shamelessly plug it one more time:

http://vanessagalore.livejournal.com/21650.html

C'mon, you know you want to...all the cool kids are doing it.

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Date: 2008-04-28 03:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] candlewaxdreams.livejournal.com
I'm a little sad that Leo has turned out to be just as corrupt as most of the other people in Neptune. Even though I didn't want him with Veronica, I really liked him. Anyway, I'm glad that Veronica and Logan were able to get Leo to cooperate with destroying the evidence against Keith. I feel like I'm on a roller coaster, about to go down the hill :)

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Date: 2008-04-29 02:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
Max Greenfield really sold that character. All you guys totally bought it that he was a nice guy! Even Vanessa Galore liked him. Until she watched and rewatched that scene of Keith interrogating him and realized that Leo totally steered the investigation toward the tabloids. Watch it again, and see if you don't see it for yourself.

There are a few other scenes that I watched and rewatched too; you just MIGHT be seeing my warped perspective on them in some future chapters. Heh heh heh. I'm trying to totally pervert canon!

Thanks again for reading and commenting! Sorry I missed your b-day, hope it was a happy one!

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Date: 2008-04-29 02:56 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alee23.livejournal.com
Yay our favourite couple is back together! Wow this is seriously shaping up to be truly epic! Can't wait to read more! :D

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Date: 2008-04-29 03:05 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
A new commenter...yay!! The airplane smut is bringing out all the secret fans! It's great to hear that you're enjoying the story--I really appreciate your taking the time to leave a comment; it's very important to me to hear from my readers.

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Date: 2008-05-05 06:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alee23.livejournal.com
I was a fan of the 1st series (i left a few comments in that one i think) and have been following this religiously too. I just keep forgetting to leave feedback. whoops!

High Mile AWSOME!!!

Date: 2008-04-29 07:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] with0ut4clue.livejournal.com

The beginning of the chap was the coolest on the airplain!!!
I totally LOVE HORNY LOGAN and the way he turns on Ronnie with just a words or touch!!! I can´t believe she was with Shitface Duncan for so long. The didn´t have any physical chemistry. NOTHING. If you see the bus cruch scene when Duncan Hugs Veronica, it is really awkward, but in the rooftops scene when Logan hugs Ronnie is like they where made for each other, she literally fits perfect with Logan.

Love the LoVe, I´m so happy that they are finally togheter and I would really like that Logan PUNCH Duncan in the future (sigh).

I really like the way you show the other side of Leo, he was to GOOD to be true, It was totally believable they way he play all of them. But Ronica´s to Smart for all of them.

Moore Chapters Soon!!!

Bakan I am in love with your fic!
Hugs and Kisses!

Re: High Mile AWSOME!!!

Date: 2008-04-30 12:57 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
I totally agree with you that Veronica and Logan have tons more sexual chemistry than Veronica and Duncan ever did; but I think that was actually the point for Veronica. Duncan was a safe boyfriend, someone who really didn't arouse the intense feelings she had for Logan, and there were periods in her life that that's what she thought she wanted. Of course, we always knew better and wanted her to get together with Logan tan rápido como posible.

Don't hate Duncan so much, he really doesn't deserve it!! C'mon. He's just kind of boring.

Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

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Date: 2008-04-29 10:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sobertears.livejournal.com
Oh wow. I hope Katja doesn't wind up screwing Duncan over in his custody, that could leave us with a psycho donut.

It's great that Leo seems to be going along with the blackmail, I was worried he wouldn't go for it. I still don't entirely trust his word though. He already revealed one very ugly side of himself. Hopefully he sticks with it.

I'm very excited to see what's going on on the Mac front. Those crazy Russians... She can take 'em!

And of course, a great HUZZAH for the reunion of the top two. They're shaping up to take this story to new levels! Good job

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Date: 2008-04-30 01:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
Hey, I think you're the only reader who's actually reading my plot!! Well, not really, but you are remarkably restrained about the smarmier aspects of my fic. Perhaps you are more mature than the rest of us!

I definitely love to throw a lot into this fic. There's so much going on that it's a good thing I have beta-readers to check that I'm not confusing myself, not to mention the readers. It's good to hear from you; I haven't heard from you in a while, and I wondered if you were still enjoying the fic...and I truly like hearing that you're paying attention to all my little side mysteries.

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Date: 2008-05-01 04:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sobertears.livejournal.com
To be completely honest, I'm not a huge fan of the sex scenes (Nobody shoot me!). It has nothing to do with you however. You do a fantastic job with them, and I do enjoy reading them, While I did, on occasion, dream of all the fantastic sex between the two, my mushy butt was a big fan of the romantic aspect of the two, so I didn't put a lot of thought into the two going at it. I'm a big plot nerd 8-). And I've been waiting to see a showdown with gory since the end of season three on television, so as you can imagine I'm super excited you took off with that angle. Rest assured, I am thoroughly enjoying your fic!

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Date: 2008-04-30 05:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] isilady.livejournal.com
this sequel is amazing,i'm so glad that logan and veronica are back together and she has told logan that she needs him....
"Christ, does everyone have to be corrupt in this town? What is it, something in the water?" Logan replies bitterly. this line really made me laugh,great logan! can't wait for the next chapters....love it

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Date: 2008-05-01 01:10 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
You've really been reading!! All of part one and now you're completely caught up on part two. Part two is really shaping up to be a long fic. Now you get to appreciate my cliffhangers: in part one, if you were reading along as I originally posted on fanfiction, you had to wait a week to find out if Logan and Dick survived the car crash. Yes, I am evil!! You should have seen the hate mail I got for doing that.

It's always great to hear that someone new is enjoying the fic. It makes me write faster, and I walk around all day with a smile on my face. Tell your friends!!

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Date: 2008-05-01 12:37 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poniesforall.livejournal.com
This post has gotten so many comments. It's great. Although you should have more because your story has everything: noir, snark, sex (of course) and some fantastic original mysteries. I am still in awe and I get to read the posts beforehand!

I think that Logan was very useful in selling the extortion to Leo. They make a good team. But now I'm sad that yet another corrupt sheriff will be in office. At least Leo isn't morally bankrupt as were Lamb and Vinnie.

You know I was a huge skeptic of this entire line of thought, but you truly won me over. You have explained it so well. Your Leo, here, comes off so thoroughly menacing. It makes perfect sense. And with Max Greenfield's reappearance in S3, I'm sure the writers were setting up something similarly dastardly. You just beat 'em to it, V. Good for you.

And are you sure that Neptune isn't actually in some alternate universe? I mean, jeez, everyone is evil. Some say even Veronica as evil in S3. (I do not.)

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Date: 2008-05-01 01:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
I'm pretty sure the writers didn't intend for Leo to turn out to be corrupt. I'm just retconning in the cracks and crevices of canon, just as they did when they shoehorned Beaver into the rape scenario. And Leo was always drawn in sharp contrast to Logan as a possible love interest for Veronica; if you saw him as a sweet boy, you were just paying attention. I feel it's ok to do such a huge about-face with this character because of the general noirish precepts that all characters are flawed and are presented with impossible moral dilemmas. Not evil. Flawed, and facing impossible situations, just as we all are. Reconsider the rape for instance: as they point out on MI.net, it's the ultimate noir solution (in season one): everyone plays a part, no one is blameless, not even Veronica (she drank a drink that she didn't watch being poured, which surely her dad warned her about), not even those who just witnessed Veronica's condition that night, such as Meg, and bear some guilt for not stepping in to stop it.

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Date: 2008-05-03 11:12 am (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
Just wanted to say that I think this story is great. I just discovered this fic and have managed to read all of part one and up to the most recent chapter of part two over the last two days, I'm hooked! Can't wait to see what happens next. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE update soon!

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Date: 2008-05-07 02:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
It's awesome when a lurker delurks!! I really enjoy hearing that a new reader has found my fics. I'm trying to update once a week, so we'll see you back here soon.

Wow - I love this fic

Date: 2008-05-04 09:48 pm (UTC)
From: (Anonymous)
So I don't have a livejournal, so I'm only anonymous, but I LOVE your writing and fics. I spent a nice rainy Saturday reading YOLD II, and last weekend reading YOLD I. I think you have captured the characters very well, and it is nice to see growth from both Veronica and Logan (and everyone else - hopefully Dick will continue to mature). I am very much looking forward to the next update.

While I am more of a plot nerd, like one of your reviewers said, the sex scenes are very well done (though I do skim over them a bit http://p-stat.livejournal.com/img/talk/sm02_wink.gif ) I think you have developed the mystery very well, and have great character development. I love that Leo isn't as squeaky clean as he seems - I had never thought of him as "dirty" and never interpreted that scene the way you did - but I see your interpretation as plausible, and it doesn't really make sense that Leo would sell *both* tapes. I love the relationship between Logan and Keith and the feeling of "home" that is developing for him - poor guy he never really had a good home environment.

I don't exactly understand all the Duncan hate either - he's not a bad guy - just a little boring. Probably if this was real life, he'd be the better one for you (sorta like Riley for Buffy), but as far as excitement and plot and chemistry, Logan and Veronica are best. I think some of this comes from the fantasy that we women have that we can "change" our men. It doesn't really work that way. But anyway, your story is fantastic - I'm sorry I have to leave an anonymous review. Great Job - and I'm looking forward to the update.

Re: Wow - I love this fic

Date: 2008-05-07 02:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
This was an incredibly gratifying comment to get. About the sex scenes: I'm trying to put a little something in for everyone in this fic. With the dwindling status of this fandom, I think there are some readers who wouldn't bother to read without the smut. The other thing is that the fic would be way too dark without it. In part one, I considered making a PG version of the one sex scene, just for readers that prefer not to read smut. This time around, I just went for it. I never thought I'd be able to pull them off, to tell the truth, and it amazed me that people were liking the sex scenes.

I feel that there has to be a resolution of the triangle between Duncan, Logan and Veronica. When Duncan ran, the possibility of a resolution was gone, so I really wanted to bring him back.

Love hearing from a new reader!! (Especially one that is willing to suspend their previous beliefs to go along with my Leo storyline.)

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Date: 2008-06-15 06:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] marmar627.livejournal.com
Can I just say that I loved the Homecoming/Risky Business reference?

EVERYBODY WANG CHUNG OR I WILL KICK YOUR ASS!

(And of course I love the rest of the fic, but I'll leave longer comments on newer chapters!)

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Date: 2008-06-15 07:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
**wink** That's not the only reference in that section.

Thanks for commenting!

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Date: 2009-02-03 04:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] celtic-flicka.livejournal.com
Your explanation for what happened with the tapes makes SO much more sense than what we saw on the show!

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Date: 2009-02-04 03:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] vanessagalore.livejournal.com
Thank you! I love finding those little holes and exploiting them. This was one of my more controversial choices in part two.